Oh hey, I didn't mean your sentence structure was unusual. (Though yeah, I like your prose style all over, not just around the porny bits. Had no idea you're an ESL, too! You make me so jealous. :-)
It's just that this part--
Later, after coming and sleeping and talking and fucking and then sleeping again
--struck me as unique and I went, hee! Now *this* is why I love reading slash, because look, this person just put the coming part of the sex scene in a subordinate clause! *g*
And I loved the hotness of it too, and I'm blathering so I'll stop now.
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It's just that this part--
Later, after coming and sleeping and talking and fucking and then sleeping again
--struck me as unique and I went, hee! Now *this* is why I love reading slash, because look, this person just put the coming part of the sex scene in a subordinate clause! *g*
And I loved the hotness of it too, and I'm blathering so I'll stop now.