I really enjoyed reading this. If I didn't know any better, I'd say that you came up with the character of Zach on your own. You really have a feel for his voice and you expressed his emotions in the way that I envision Zach doing it. I hope that made sense.
This line was when I knew I loved it: in a paragraph that Zach reads like he's watching a train wreck in slow motion.
To me, that just perfectly describes the way that Zach feels when he's reading that scene for the first time. He's probably never thought about that kind of thing, at least not as much as this book is causing him to, and that was a great description of his feelings about it.
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This line was when I knew I loved it: in a paragraph that Zach reads like he's watching a train wreck in slow motion.
To me, that just perfectly describes the way that Zach feels when he's reading that scene for the first time. He's probably never thought about that kind of thing, at least not as much as this book is causing him to, and that was a great description of his feelings about it.