I really enjoyed this. I agree with Mal about the emotional journey, and one of the things that appealed to me was how real the whole thing felt. By that I mean a lot of the times situations and characters are a bit exaggerated, which is all good drama and everything, but I think it's actually more of a challenge to come up with a story that feels so much like RL. LOL! Normal for dS, at least.
I liked the way RayV was sort of cautious around RayK at first, that's what I mean about the situations feeling real. Who wouldn't behave like that, that has just returned to an old workplace *and* with all the baggage they are all carrying? And then RayK is sort of relieved when RayV goes back to his normal self, which makes you feel they are slowly starting to function normally around each other because they can be more like themselves. I think these things are infinitely harder to portray than the good old fight with papers flying everywhere.
I really felt for them when Fraser was trying to make plans for xmas. Both of them know what he's doing, but they can't quite make the leap and say it out loud. Ouch.
“… can’t, Fraser. Besides, what would that look like, huh? You and me, spending Christmas together?”
His fingers are sweating around the black plastic phone, “I don’t know, Ray.”
“No, you don’t.” Ray’s voice isn’t unkind.
Oh yes you do...And then he knocks papers off the desk. And doesn't pick them up? That's what finally convinced me he's in love, you know ;-)
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Date: 2007-01-12 12:56 am (UTC)I liked the way RayV was sort of cautious around RayK at first, that's what I mean about the situations feeling real. Who wouldn't behave like that, that has just returned to an old workplace *and* with all the baggage they are all carrying? And then RayK is sort of relieved when RayV goes back to his normal self, which makes you feel they are slowly starting to function normally around each other because they can be more like themselves. I think these things are infinitely harder to portray than the good old fight with papers flying everywhere.
I really felt for them when Fraser was trying to make plans for xmas. Both of them know what he's doing, but they can't quite make the leap and say it out loud. Ouch.
“… can’t, Fraser. Besides, what would that look like, huh? You and me, spending Christmas together?”
His fingers are sweating around the black plastic phone, “I don’t know, Ray.”
“No, you don’t.” Ray’s voice isn’t unkind.
Oh yes you do...And then he knocks papers off the desk. And doesn't pick them up? That's what finally convinced me he's in love, you know ;-)